FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: I Climb

Up.

Up.

I climb.

Step after step.

Reaching for the obscured summit.

Where an unknown fate lays waiting for me.

With each tedious step, I grow more doubtful that I’ll reach the top.

I cannot stop, cannot look down; for if I do, I will neither make it back down nor to my destination.

The light at the top shines like a beacon of hope, edges me forward to take those last precious steps as my lungs gasp for the thinning air and my tired legs shake uncontrollably.

 

copyright – Jennifer Pendergast

——88 words—–

Only 88 words because I based the word count for each sentence in the Fibonacci sequence and the next number in the sequence would have put me well over 100.  I thought the spiraling effect played well with the picture. I often use this form in poetry with syllable count. Let me know what you think.

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19 thoughts on “FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: I Climb

  1. deanabo says:

    This is terrific!

  2. yepiratehere says:

    Very clever stylistically…and it works, one does feel tired reading it!

  3. Peripatetic Eric says:

    Yes. Yes. That’s good. Very interesting concept.

  4. Sarah Ann says:

    Thanks for the explantion. I was even more impressed on second reading.

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  6. kdillmanjones says:

    So creative with the Fibonacci sequence!

  7. Creative. I enjoyed reading.

  8. Up. Up. I climb. Nice beginning, and follow-through thereafter. But what’s up there and is it worth it?

  9. A Fibonacci fable – love it!

  10. t says:

    A perfect description of “midlife” in 88 words!

  11. Up, up and away. Nice one.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  12. kz says:

    wow very impressive.. great style

  13. Great use of the Fibonacci Sequence.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  14. annisik51 says:

    I like your Fibonnaci sequence. Nearly went with Fib myself! But I like that you’ve imposed this shape and rhythm. I shall certainly steal this idea! Ann

  15. elmowrites says:

    Fibonacci poetry – great idea! As you know, I’m a fan of his!

  16. Brilliant. What can I say more just brilliant,

  17. Joe Owens says:

    An interesting style that is new to me.

  18. Ankita says:

    You’ve done a fabulous take on the prompt! Absolutely loved it! 🙂 Very strong and inspiriging 🙂

  19. Ankita says:

    You’ve done a fabulous take on the prompt! Absolutely loved it! 🙂 Very strong and inspiring 🙂

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