FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Bundles

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: EVERY FRIDAY AUTHORS FROM AROUND THE WORLD GATHER TO SHARE THEIR 100-WORDS BASED ON THE PHOTO PROMPT HOSTED BY ROCHELLE WISOFF, OFFERING CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM AND ENCOURAGEMENT TO EACH OTHER. READERS ARE ENCOURAGED TO COMMENT AS WELL. HERE’S MY SHORT CONTRIBUTION…

Copyright -Sandra Crook

Copyright -Sandra Crook

“Wha…what should I do with…?” Suzette sobbed.

“Quick! Hide it in the hay on the tractor over there before it leaves. It’s small enough no one will notice, ” John dictated.

“But… what about when the tractor reaches it’s destination?”

“It’ll become bird food I suppose. Only natural.”

Suzette broke down, sobbing uncontrollably, unable to continue. John grabbed the blanketed bundle from her and tossed it between the hay,”Then I’ll do it myself!”

“No more.” John dragged Suzette back inside and whispered, “I told you I didn’t want him. Any more babies will end up like your little Michael. Got it.”

—100 words:Horror/Thriller/Suspense—

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22 thoughts on “FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Bundles

  1. litadoolan says:

    Cuts to the quick fast! Has a high impact. The end was such a twist.

  2. Yikes! I wasn’t ready for that one. I think you need to change something here: ” I told you I didn’t him.”

    janet

  3. Yikes! Can that guy say sociopath?

  4. Sandra says:

    Wow! that was a savage one.

  5. K.Z. says:

    savage indeed! a real nightmare!

  6. This is powerful and chilling. Really horrifying!

  7. Dear Jennifer,

    This is probably the most horrifying story I’ve read this week. There are too many true stories out there. Powerful and well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    • zennjennc says:

      Thanks! There are some elements here taken from some recent local news stories. Reality can be more horrifying than fiction. Sometimes all you need to do when writing horror or thrillers is watch the news and scrabble different story elements together in a bowl with some fictional seasonings.

  8. Well-written story although truly horrifying. Sickening to think babies are really just tossed away or left somewhere like that but it happens. Happily some are found still alive and taken to help.

    • zennjennc says:

      Yes it is. Stories like these the villain is sometimes romanticized to some excuse is made for behavior, I may have to take this one further and show a real dark monster.

  9. A real tale of horror. Poor Suzette. Well written.

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