FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Fish in the Sea

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: EVERY FRIDAY AUTHORS FROM AROUND THE WORLD GATHER TO SHARE THEIR 100-WORDS BASED ON THE PHOTO PROMPT HOSTED BY ROCHELLE WISOFF, OFFERING CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT AND ENCOURAGEMENT TO EACH OTHER. READERS ARE ENCOURAGED TO COMMENT AS WELL. HERE’S MY (SHORT) CONTRIBUTION…

Copyright - C. Hase

Copyright – C. Hase

EXT.  JAPANESE GARDENS – AFTERNOON

Hana stands on the wooden bridge overlooking the koi, surrounded by the spring blooms of the garden. Kazou walks up to her unnoticed, placing his arms around her waist in a light embrace.

KAZOU

(quietly to Hanako)

Look at the fish swimming, Hana, enjoying the garden’s beauty.

HANA

(bluntly)

You cannot know that the fish are enjoying the garden without being a fish.

KAZOU

(laughing)

You cannot know that I do not know without being me.

HANA

(arms crossed)

Perhaps not…

KAZOU

(kneeling on one knee)

Let me tell you what I do know, my dear Hana…

—Romantic Screen Play: 100 words—

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12 thoughts on “FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Fish in the Sea

  1. elappleby says:

    I really like this. It’s simple, pretty and sweet. Excellent.

  2. Hawaii was the first time I had ever seen a koi pond.
    Very peaceful to sit and watch.

  3. Very romantic indeed. And Hana is playing hard to get.

  4. Sandra says:

    Very true – and atmospheric.

  5. Dear Jenn,

    Short, sweet and romantic.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  6. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Zennjenn, Being a screen writer, I applaud your departure from the norm. Very well done. When do we start filming?

    Aloha,

    Doug

  7. I’d really like to know what follows.
    Patrick

  8. Kazou is a very likable character; so far.

  9. CherryPickens says:

    *sigh* Sometimes I reach the end of the 100 words, and I want so much more. This is one of those times. Beautifully written.

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