Goodbye

Copyright -Renee Heath

Copyright -Renee Heath

I just had to get out of this god-forsaken, goodbye town before I turned into a permanent fixture like the Bidwell Exchange purveyor of overpriced tickets to a better life.  I was just a little short on cash for the train ticket to Chicago. Outside the Exchange, I did whatever I could for the last $100 dollars I needed to purchase my ticket to fame and fortune in America’s Second City. I sang. I danced. I juggled. I even told jokes. The problem with a goodbye town though…there is no one around to toss you one lousy dollar for your trouble.

—100 words—

Had Lady A’s ‘Goodbye Town’ stuck in my head when I saw the prompt for this week 🙂

FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: EVERY FRIDAY (OR CLOSE ENOUGH)  AUTHORS FROM AROUND THE WORLD GATHER HERE TO SHARE THEIR 100-WORDS BASED ON THE PHOTO PROMPT HOSTED BY ROCHELLE WISOFF, OFFERING CONSTRUCTIVE CRIT AND ENCOURAGEMENT TO EACH OTHER. READERS ARE ENCOURAGED TO COMMENT AS WELL. FOR MORE FRIDAY FICTIONEERS’ STORIES…

 

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13 thoughts on “Goodbye

  1. Good luck to her! I’ll toss her a dollar, but only that. Creates the mood, for sure.

  2. Joe Owens says:

    When everyone wants to leave they will grip their dollars tight.

  3. Ye Pirate says:

    A very nice account. Your last line was powerful, ringing true with the fragility of luck.

  4. pattisj says:

    Don’t you love when inspiration gels like that? Great story.

  5. kz says:

    you made me feel for the character.. i wish her luck 🙂

  6. Lot of wisdom in this story. Ther is something almost proverbial in your story

  7. Ah. Hope someone comes up with a few bucks. She will get out.

  8. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Zen Genie,

    A lovely story that made me smile and drop a fiver in her hat there on the sidewalk. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  9. Dear Jenn,

    Your well-written, concise and hard-hitting story made me smile. I love “godforsaken goodbye town.” Bravo!

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  10. Somebody needs to send her out of town – maybe on a rail, Randy

  11. Thanks for turning me onto this song.

  12. rheath40 says:

    Darling if you only knew how close you are to the way I felt when I snapped that picture. I’d give that dance all of that 100.00 she needs to get out of that god-forsaken goodbye town. You made me cry….

  13. neenslewy says:

    You paint a good picture. Vivid. Especially the ending – I like the idea of a goodbye town.

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