FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Tough day?

Copyright - Douglas M. MacIlroy

Copyright – Douglas M. MacIlroy

“Tough day?” the winged creature sitting on the cloud next to the check-in gate asked as a tardy friend dragged in.

“Like you wouldn’t believe. I think that kid has a death wish,” the winged friend confessed.

“Better yours than mine,” the first winged creature lowered his voice, “I think mine might be you-know-who in the flesh.”

“What makes you say that? You’re done early everyday,” the friend prodded.

“Because the kid shuts himself up in his room after school everyday and doesn’t come out until morning. He’s not doing homework; I’ve seen his grades.”

“Think we should tell Him?”

—100 words—

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10 thoughts on “FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Tough day?

  1. kz says:

    guardian angels 🙂 i like this. the “you-know-who in the flesh” made me chuckle.

  2. Jan Brown says:

    Very amusing! But maybe they should hold off telling Him till they’re sure…. On the other hand, he probably knows.

  3. The kid has a death wish….his poor mother, take good care of him!

  4. Mystikel says:

    It’s kind of a relief to know guardian angels can’t see what goes on behind closed doors. Ummm….not for me but for, you know, other people.

  5. pattisj says:

    What fun, you-know-who. Oh dear.

  6. Dear Jenn,

    There are things even a guardian angel can’t prevent. This ending has an ominous feel to it. Sounds like an allusion to one of the teens who’ve resorted to mass murder. In any case, nicely written, believable dialogue.

    shalom,

    Rochelle

  7. Great story-telling – and leaves us with that uncertainty at the end of the piece. I like!

  8. troy P. says:

    I’m with Rochelle in that I would like to know more about who is the “you know who” – very well written dialogue too!

  9. Time to rewrite some popular Books I won’t name here.
    Nice story.

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