FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Do You Believe?

Copyright - Sarah Ann Hall

Copyright – Sarah Ann Hall

Leila ran her hand along the fence winding through the overgrown heather. Despite its unkempt appearance the grove had a rustic peace. Wondering why Ian had brought her to such an unusual place, she retraced her path backed to a westward gazing Ian.

“Do you believe in fairies?” Ian continued his persistent gaze toward the sun’s surrender to twilight’s shadows.

This was not the question Leila had been hoping for, but she repressed her dismay and lightly answered with a shrug, “I guess; how else would one get to Neverland?”

“Seriously,” Ian turned to her with darkness in his eyes.

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12 thoughts on “FRIDAY FICTIONEERS: Do You Believe?

  1. Steve B says:

    Very well written! Great use of imagery. I especially like “the sun’s surrender to twilight’s shadows.” An intriguing ending that leaves you wanting more, like someone tore the next page out of the book!

  2. Oooh, I like this one. There’s so much you could read into this. Is this just idle speculative conversation, or is Ian one of the Fae folk? (And we all know that nothing good can come of hanging out with faeries, darling)

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  4. Everything in your story just flows along smoothly and I agree with Steve about your use of imagery. Just in case you want to put in one more word, “westward-gazing” yearns for a hyphen. 🙂

    Thanks for the picture, which seemed very peaceful until the Fictioneers got to work on it!

    janet

  5. I really like how the language flows like the water in this story…

  6. Interesting that this was the question she had been hoping for.

  7. Dear Jenn,
    I loved the peaceful picture you painted for us…that is, up until the end.
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  8. JackieP says:

    So is he a fairy then? Oh how great. Makes me want to read more to find out.

  9. This seems to have a sinister turn at the end, at least the “darkness in his eyes” hints at that for me. Are fairies perhaps not as good as we hoped?

  10. Hmm, what’s with Ian anyway? Doesn’t seem like a fairy-type response. Intriguing opening to a longer tale I’d like to read.

  11. Sarah Ann says:

    I don’t get the impression that’s a good darkness in his eyes. Good one.

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