Ghoulish Flash Fiction A to Z: Edimmu (Sumerian)

Shadowy figures dragged Kish’s body over near the large tree as Šherida began painting the sky violent shades of red. They hurriedly dug a shallow grave and dumped his body in face down. No last rites were given before they tossed him in and loosely tossed the dirt over his battered body. As the sun erased Šherida’s masterpiece the figures rode off into the distance, leaving the tree to stand guard over Kish’s body.

From Scott Vanatter with permission-Copyright- Indira

From Scott Vanatter with permission-Copyright- Indira

Before Nanna could make his rise high in the night sky, Kish’s ghost rose beneath the tree branches dancing eerily in the moonlight to seek vengeance.

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Today’s haunting is inspired by the Edimmu, the ghost of those not buried properly.

It’s also that time for Friday Fictioneers, this tree picture will also be perfect for next Friday’s haunting so I might reuse it. 

Sumerian Mythology

Šherida– goddess of dawn

Nanna-moon god

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14 thoughts on “Ghoulish Flash Fiction A to Z: Edimmu (Sumerian)

  1. I sure hope Kish isn’t pissed at me; I’m already having nightmares! Moody and atmospheric piece …

  2. The start of a terrific ghost story.

  3. I watch out for those ghosts when I meet my next tree

  4. claireful says:

    Full of myth and tradition – I liked this.

  5. A ghoulish story indeed. The story really moved along well and I like the way you introduced characters that are unfamiliar to me and probably to many of us. I think you could make this section better if you re-ordered it so that it doesn’t talk twice about putting his body in the grave. When the second sentence comes along, you’ve already mentioned putting him in the grave once.

    “They hurriedly dug a shallow grave and dumped his body in face down. No last rites were given before they tossed him in and loosely tossed the dirt over his battered body.”

    Something along the lines of “They hurriedly dug a shallow grave, dumped his body in face down and loosely tossed dirt over his battered body, without even giving him last rites.” (Just an example.)

    janet

    • zennjennc says:

      Thanks Janet, I think I rewrite that several times and still wasn’t satisfied with it. I’ll take your comments into considerations when editing. I appreciate the help.

  6. Sandra says:

    The strangeness of the names in this piece adds to its ghostly appeal. Well done.

  7. elappleby says:

    I popped over to Wikipedia to do a bit of research on this one! Very interesting – and educational too!

  8. Dear Jenn,
    You’ve painted a vivid picture with this one. I love “violent shades of red.” Well done.
    shalom,
    Rochelle

  9. jwdwrites says:

    Lovely and poetic. You have a beautiful style of writing that I really enjoyed. 🙂

  10. The ghost of those not buried properly…I certainly am learning a lot this week!

  11. zennjennc says:

    I’m glad you all like learning some new things this week.

  12. Thanks for another great ghost story. I’m really enjoying your A-Z stories.

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