Friday Fictioneers: Twister

The sky turned a sick green. A twister filled the country horizon barreling toward the farmhouse, the epitome of a prairie paradise.  Windows fractured from the pressure differential in the storm. Vera grabbed her little one and ran for the storm shelter as the  twister ripped up trees and spat them out like used toothpicks . She sheltered there while the storm raged.

Copyright-Janet Webb

Copyright-Janet Webb

When storm was over, Vera opened the cellar doors to clear, blue skies. The old barn was roughed up and there was a tree on top of the van, but a rainbow smiled down on the farmhouse.

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17 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: Twister

  1. Well done and a beautiful ending the tree missed the cellar door. The rainbow is a nice touch.

  2. deanabo says:

    This is really good.

  3. Dear Jenn,
    Thanks for the happy ending. Tornadoes are capricious “animals” leaving one building standing while demolishing the one next door. You captured that.
    one note…Your first sentence: “The sky turned a sick and green.” I suspect you did what I’ve often done in backspacing. So I’m guessing you’re going for either “The sky turned sick and green”. Or “The sky turned a sick green.” Yes?
    Shalom,
    Rochelle

  4. I’m glad they made it through the tornado. Fortunately, I’ve never been through one, but from all I’ve seen and read, this must have been frightening. Rochelle already mentioned the one thing I saw that needed correction.

    janet

  5. yebuccaneer says:

    A TORNADO! I was looking for one with the barn…kind of liked the tree on the van most! Strong description starting from the first line…

  6. zennjennc says:

    Thanks! I got that first sentence fixed. I kept playing with the wording there and guess I didn’t delete everything.

  7. Sandra says:

    I love a happy ending. And the visual image of a sick green sky too. Well done.

  8. Joe Owens says:

    It is amazing how quickly a tornado system can turn a beautiful day to terror and be gone again to reveal more blue sky that contrasts tot he horrific damage. I could feel their fear.

  9. Well told tale, delightful ending.

  10. that’s exactly the color of the sky before a tornado, “sick green.” –great image

  11. Wow, and the farmhouse never blew her out of Kansas 😉 nice take.

  12. abraham says:

    Refreshing ending!

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